What do you think of my prologue? ?The air. Its swirls around me cold and thick even with the sun beating down. The wind teases leaves of gold, red, orange and brown as they fall from the trees. If the cold didn't bite your noise you wouldn't even know it was real. That's what I saw when I closed my eyes.
A foreign place in the fall of beauty, familiarity and cold wind. When I opened them? Well the sun still beat down. But there was a towel beneath my body and I had fistfuls of sand in my fingers. My head was in Joey's lap and his hands were combing through my wet hair. Erin rolled on to her back next to me making sure to even out her tan. Just another typical summer day at the beach in SD, Cali. Why visions of fall, which never seemed to really come in Cali, haunted my head at the moment I don't know. I don't wouldn't really care much either. If it hadn't been in my head so much lately. At least six times a day now. Worse than one of Erin's unwanted obsessions. The smell of salt water and sand drifted all around from the waves, only yards away. And the scene vanished from the inside of my lids. Joey, Erin, Noelle, Glen and I had headed to the beach around 8 o'clock that morning. That had been hours ago and the beginning of summer had been at least 2 weeks ago. Still almost every day my friends and I were at Pacific Beach hanging by the ocean. It was really hard to tire of it.
"Joey heads up," someone yelled. I sat up on my towel and Joey ran backwards trying to catch an orange Frisbee that was spiraling though the sky towards my friend Noelle who was working up the courage to walking out farther into the waves and dive in. no matter how warm the sun made the water the first dive under was always cold. Cold, and never expected even if you pretty much lived on the beach like we did. Joey sprang into the air for the Frisbee. He missed and landed on his stomach in the water practically at Noelle's feet. It was Noelle who caught the Frisbee. She pulled her arm back to throw it back to a boy I think we knew from school. Was his name Tanner? Before she could I stood up and yelled, "Noel, over here!" she faked the Frisbee to Tanner who jumped to catch it realizing when he hit the sand that Noelle hadn't thrown it to him. Instead it spun into my hand with ease. "Good aim!" I shouted at Noelle. I tossed the Frisbee in Tanner's direction. And as I planned it sailed over his head and into the hands of the girl behind him who ran with it. Todd shot me a look and chased after her. It had been a peeved look. But I knew he wouldn't hold it against me. Guys hardly held anything against Noelle, Erin and me. Why? Maybe because any guy would consider Noelle with her dark brown eyes, coco skin, and straight dark hair beautiful, while Erin in her red bikini, with skin like snow in the winter, bronze in the summer and country style blonde hair was a definite challenge. What they saw in me, well it wasn't any of that. I looked pretty average to me. And yet I'm the only one who seemed to notice that. Fine, whatever, it's okay with me.
I sat down again next to Erin. I had too much energy to continue sun bathing. I poked Erin in the side. "I'm sleeping," she mumbled. "No you're not," I smirked. "How would you know I'm wearing sunglasses," she protested. I laughed and took her right hand. I pulled her off her pink and orange flower print towel and into the sand. Sighing she pushed herself onto her feet and followed me as I retreated to the water joining Noelle where the water was waist deep. The waves rolled in and I dunked Noelle and Erin under only to be held under by both of them for two waves after. Joey and Glen were surfing, Glen on long board and Joey on short board, farther down the beach. The boardwalk lurked with tourists and shops to our right. Yep, just another typical California summer day in the life of Lydia Scott.
Sorry its a lot to read. I'm just wondering if i should scape it. oh and the book is about why she has those pics of fall in her head and that her normal life isn't gonna stay normal much longer. i know thats typical, but i plan to put in some twists....:) THANKS!
Posted by Marco Polo
GREAT!
But im only 12
nice detailing
Posted by Bishop
I like it, good balance with your descriptions, it flows well, and you get the "fun at the beach" vibe across. great work!
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